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My Goal I won't take a bus, anymore, anymore, I won't take a bus anymore, I'll buy a car and learn to drive, when I am twenty-five. I won't fly a kite, anymore, anymore, I won't fly a kite anymore, I'll be a pilot and be free, when I am thirty-three. I won't cry and be sad, anymore, anymore, I won't cry and be sad anymore, I 'll be brave and tall, when I am forty-four. I won't take a pill, anymore, anymore, I won't take a pill anymore, I'll be strong and fine, when I am ninety-nine. 評語：Gary * The title of the poem matches the poem very well. * The idea is very good and very creative. * The ages you used were 25,33,44, and 99. Only 25 seems a bit out of place because it does not match the others. Maybe it should have been 22. However,then you would need to find a new word to rhyme with two. Drive and five rhyme well. *I loved the last part about not taking a pill when you are 99. *Overall,very,VERY creative and well thought out and organized ─CONGRATULATIONS!